Apr 26, 2013

Help Me Dream




sure look inviting, taking my hand
needed to find my way back
fake people with complications
almost wrecked my self-assurance 
nice to be here, you help me dream
          of far-out groovy places
                  again.

@ donetta sifford 4-26-2013


http://www.trifectawritingchallenge.com/2013/04/trifextra-week-sixty-four_26.html




12 comments:

  1. Far-out groovy. Far out! Have missed that saying. Something that feels real and honest in a fake world is what I take from your writing...which is wonderful!

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  2. I love to dream of far out groovy places.

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  3. Lovely piece Donetta! I adore the last couple of lines. Great use of the prompt!

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  4. Great-hopeful sentiment in this piece. It hit home with me. Nicely done.

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    1. Thanks. I don't say 'far-out'. I do however use the word 'groovy' in everyday talk. Born in '76 and raised in by my grandparents, I heard my aunt and several cousins use that word a lot. So, over the years it stuck with me. Even in the early '90's, my high school years. I may have been born a era too late. lol

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  6. far out and groovy places, what a blast from the past. I like the humanity in this piece. That awkwardness of that phrase really shows how the person has got much to heal.

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    1. Thank you. I liked the phrase you used with it, 'blast from the past'. I explained to Draug above, I don't say 'far-out' but I do use 'groovy' in my every day talking due to growing up hearing my aunt and cousins use the term, as well as my mom. I also lived for Saturday morning cartoons, with our 3 stations, and watched Scooby Doo a lot. :)

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  7. This feels like an honest, heart-felt conversation. I also like the last line. It reminds me of the Brady Bunch (I was a 70's child too, so I watched a fair amount of that show!)

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  8. I love the line "fake people with complications ...' good job on the prompt.

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