Aug 4, 2013

Defeated






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Everyone buys into this facade.
When it's you I wish to fool. 
Only you can see through me.
Underneath my laughter, 
where my soul is gray and
my shadow hangs it's head,
defeated.

@ donetta sifford 8-4-2013

Written for: Trifecta 


10 comments:

  1. Donetta, sorry if this is a repeat comment (I don't think my first attempt went through).

    "Underneath my laughter,where my soul is gray..." is a lovely phrase. I like that the voice was speaking directly to another person. Gives it more intimacy. Well done! :))

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  2. Since you wrote with such a serious tone, I am not sure if my reaction is appropriate but, I spent the better part of my life looking for that one person who could see through my facade, deep beyond the pale, to the core of who I was. I always felt incomplete until I met my wife when I was 36. Now my soul soars. I leave you with a wish for colourful innards. :)

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    1. Your reaction is very appropriate. Thank you for sharing. I am 36 now. Perhaps there is hope. :) I'm glad you met someone whom completes you. Very hard to find indeed.

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  3. There's always that one person that it never works on...but that is what makes the person special.

    Thank you for linking up!

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  4. I'm always worried about the people who can see underneath.

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  5. I hope you find that one who can truly see you.

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  6. I really like this....well done.

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  7. This is beautiful. It is sad in a way, but I still see it as hopeful. That one person could see beyond the facade is actually a good thing.

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  8. I like it Donetta. You have such a way with setting the mood.

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