Feb 13, 2014

Comfortably You






This week we're asking for exactly 33 of your own words about love gone wrong.  But we're asking that you not use any of the following words:

love
sad
tears
wept
heart
pain


Trying to recapture feelings
shared in a dim lit room
as I watched you strumming
your guitar, singing Elton John.
My mind keeps conjuring 
our bitter ending, words of anger,
you comfortably yourself. 


donetta sifford 2-13-2014

Written for:  Trifecta 

 


14 comments:

  1. I adore this!

    Great last line!

    Ally :)

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  2. It's always worse when they're just themselves, isn't it?!

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  3. I adore this too! It's hard to want to be in love with someone who is all wrong-it makes them all the more irresistible, and when they play the guitar too...Oh Lord!

    Really cool piece, Donetta!

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    1. Thank you. It does seem that's human nature............. if someone seems uninterested, the more interesting they become.

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  4. An angry break up is harder when the other person seems unaffected.

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  5. God, how I love your style. How acutely I felt the one forever being merely an option for the other.

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    1. Thank you so much. It is hard being an option and made to feel like you'll still never be quiet the one they choose. Very tiring on the heart.

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  6. I like the contrast. Great work!

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  7. Even worse when the other party is unaffected ..

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  8. You comfortably yourself - such a powerful line. It feels like it adds so much insult to the injury of the breakup.

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  9. A perfect last line. Thanks for linking up.

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  10. I wasn't looking at it that way..........but you are right about the insult. Kinda the line, "It's not me, it's you." lol. Thank you for stopping by.

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